Thank you for sharing this. This is a really dope one, and I love your reflection on how organs experience things differently, but there is this notion of collective compromise, 🙏🏽💚. The opening was so dope.
"our loyalty is compromised and we might fail together." was kinda the prompt. I thought this line was powerful on it's own, could easily be a one sentence poem if that was my mood. Pulling from past experiences and stories told to me helped me build it.
I saw each organ as a person. But if we have issues with trusting others, what's the deeper issue? What's happening to us individually that effects trusting ourselves and others?
I love this because the past couple years I’ve really been working on trusting my intuition. And I think our physical bodies are a big piece to that. Trusting them. The parts
Of course. Our physical bodies go through the ebb and flow just like our mental and emotional health, probably at the same time. I believe that when we're experiencing change, its important to take care of the whole body. Its easy to focus on the obvious parts that cause discomfort because that's what we see first. But what about everything else?
Fuck. I'm a little teary-eyed. I don't know why I didn't see trust issues and vulnerability coming, but after reading this, there was no better subject for Organs.
I knew this one was gonna hit too hard as I was writing it. I've been cussing at it for three days and at every part. The imagery makes it hard for me to reread it.
Thank you so much for reading M.P. I appreciate you🫂💙✨
Yeah I wanted to stretch these lines a lil longer so I know it wouldn't have the same flow as at least skin and nerves. To me it reads as separate poems, a group conversation and testimonies. Surprisingly, writing it took just as much effort as writing skin and those lines are much shorter.
This is fantastic, and definitely not what I wanted to read what I was chewing up my morning meds, but still, immaculate work. (Try getting to the line about pills AS you're chewing up Mexican Xanax...)
This line 😮💨
“…speculations on who’s burning their end of the bridge first…”
Jamal, yes! I'm still processing this line alone. It's painful.
Thank you so much for reading🙏🏽💙✨
Whew!
Your artistic soul is really shining through on this one!
I'm showing more of me a lil bit at a time.
Thank you so much for reading🙏🏽💙✨
You get better and better every time you pick up a pen
I'm trying. Thank you so much for reading.🥰🥹🥰🥹
Thank you for sharing this. This is a really dope one, and I love your reflection on how organs experience things differently, but there is this notion of collective compromise, 🙏🏽💚. The opening was so dope.
I'm glad you enjoyed it Miguel💙
"our loyalty is compromised and we might fail together." was kinda the prompt. I thought this line was powerful on it's own, could easily be a one sentence poem if that was my mood. Pulling from past experiences and stories told to me helped me build it.
I saw each organ as a person. But if we have issues with trusting others, what's the deeper issue? What's happening to us individually that effects trusting ourselves and others?
I love this because the past couple years I’ve really been working on trusting my intuition. And I think our physical bodies are a big piece to that. Trusting them. The parts
Of course. Our physical bodies go through the ebb and flow just like our mental and emotional health, probably at the same time. I believe that when we're experiencing change, its important to take care of the whole body. Its easy to focus on the obvious parts that cause discomfort because that's what we see first. But what about everything else?
This was incredible
Thank you so much for reading Alexis! 💙
My name is Alexis too 🤭 👋🏽. It's rare that I meet other people that share the same name, in person and on the socials.
I had no idea your name is actually Alexis!! Ahh that’s so cool :)
Fuck. I'm a little teary-eyed. I don't know why I didn't see trust issues and vulnerability coming, but after reading this, there was no better subject for Organs.
Mixing up the structure was a powerful choice.
Damn.
I knew this one was gonna hit too hard as I was writing it. I've been cussing at it for three days and at every part. The imagery makes it hard for me to reread it.
Thank you so much for reading M.P. I appreciate you🫂💙✨
It’s damn good, it’s on my mind again this morning as I take my meds ha ha!
as with the previous 3, its blistering powerful and steeped in emotion.
not as poetic as the previous poems but ragdoll shaking hard in the paras and relax breath in breath out on those short lines.
every word is THE word.
Yeah I wanted to stretch these lines a lil longer so I know it wouldn't have the same flow as at least skin and nerves. To me it reads as separate poems, a group conversation and testimonies. Surprisingly, writing it took just as much effort as writing skin and those lines are much shorter.
Thank you so much for reading!🙏🏽💙✨
these are bated breath things Alex! each one is just brilliant. 🫡
I appreciate you Nick🥰
Finding the right words while focusing on breath control can be tricky sometimes. So it takes me a while to write the poems. Like writing song lyrics.
This is fantastic, and definitely not what I wanted to read what I was chewing up my morning meds, but still, immaculate work. (Try getting to the line about pills AS you're chewing up Mexican Xanax...)
Reading this while taking meds - that's hard. I knew as I was writing it this wouldn't sit easy on the stomach or the spirit.
I appreciate you reading!🙏🏽💙✨
This is great.
A symbiotic failure.
🤌🏽❤️
Yes it is and the first stanza captures that the most since its written about lungs. This one is my favorite.
Thank you so much for reading💙✨
Yup, caught the lungs. It’s my favorite part of it all, besides the kidneys (if I got it right)
I almost added kidneys but I went with liver instead. I thought about liver damage from alcohol.